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Chained to a wall of darkness
I can see the light above
Left in repeated broken dreams
Craving the air I'm deprived of

But I'm not going this alone
You're chained here as well
Shadows walk among us
You comfort me in this hell

You catch my blackened tears
I warm your freezing heart
Perfect in a messed up way
Always together when we fall apart
I wrote this because of a book I am reading. It's called Sunshine and it has really inspired me lately.
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buggy6565 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It is a very sweetly dark sentiment.
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chita21 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2010
this was a great concept. i especially love the middle stanza.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2010  Professional Writer
Wonderful lyrics... :clap:
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alyth3cat Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2010
Love it! Whats odd is this perfectly describes a short story I wrote once. Inspires me to keep working on it! Keep up the good work.
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0Demonic-Angel0 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love the way you've done this, very well written and full of those dark images. Well done!
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armymanski Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love this one! It flows perfectly until the last two stanzas. But even then it still is so visual.
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Vampiric-Time-Lord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
What is wrong with the last two stanzas?
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armymanski Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Nothing is necessarily wrong with them, but as you read the poem I noticed how the first three just flowed and rhymed at the ends of them. But then when I got to the last two the rhythm changed. It is a beautiful poem, I just thought I would point that out.
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Vampiric-Time-Lord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Well thank you. I enjoy all the help that I can get.
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