Chained to a wall of darkness
I can see the light above
Left in repeated broken dreams
Craving the air I'm deprived of
But I'm not going this alone
You're chained here as well
Shadows walk among us
You comfort me in this hell
You catch my blackened tears
I warm your freezing heart
Perfect in a messed up way
Always together when we fall apart
I wrote this because of a book I am reading. It's called Sunshine and it has really inspired me lately.
It is a very sweetly dark sentiment.
this was a great concept. i especially love the middle stanza.
Love it! Whats odd is this perfectly describes a short story I wrote once. Inspires me to keep working on it! Keep up the good work.
I love the way you've done this, very well written and full of those dark images. Well done!
I love this one! It flows perfectly until the last two stanzas. But even then it still is so visual.
What is wrong with the last two stanzas?
Nothing is necessarily wrong with them, but as you read the poem I noticed how the first three just flowed and rhymed at the ends of them. But then when I got to the last two the rhythm changed. It is a beautiful poem, I just thought I would point that out.